"YOU HAVE FAILED. You have made the mistake."
"No!"
The dragon roared. His flame leapt high into the air,
setting the trees around him alight with dancing shadows. Orange light
glittered off of a thousand droplets for a second. But then it was gone,
smothered by the dark sky. Rain drops sizzled off his human skin as it burned, threatening
to rip open and reveal his true dragon body. He fell to the ground, his mind
roiling within his head. The dark father was cruel.
He did no wrong! He would have the realm. The realm was his
already. Barely suppressing his flame he stood tall, turning a contempt full
pair of eyes to the forest around him.
No crickets chirped, no crickets dared raise their tiny
voice while a dragon was present. The entire sphere of his vision was silent,
as quiet as a cave, except for the rain falling on the trees.
And the dragon breathed, trailing puffs of smoke from his
nostrils. His lungs rasped with every breath and his whole body shuddered.
But he smiled. His lips curled back revealing vile fangs
that did not belong in a human body.
The dark father did not know everything. Time was all he
needed, and he had plenty of time.
The dragon ripped out of the human body as he tore into the
air, beating the wind with his wings. The trees sank beneath him quickly as he
rose to the sky.
CHAPTER I
CLIPSEOLAR SAT UP. The dark tendrils of the night wrapped
around him. A swirl of emotions churned in his stomach. The boy’s heart beat in
his chest like it wanted to get out of a cage and his hands shook slightly. He
pressed them deep into the folds of his blanket to make them stop.
Inside the shadows, lurking right on the edges of his
vision, he felt a strange presence that made him recoil and gag. He searched
the room, barely wanting to find anything. But no matter how hard he looked, he
could not see what it was.
The moon shone bright outside, but she only spilled some of
her silken rays in through the window and onto the crude dirt floor of the
small hut. Long, dark shadows encroached upon the silvery light from the
deepest corners of the room. The boy’s heart pounded even faster than it
already was as he looked into the strange cavities. He wanted to cry out, even
though he was not sure why. But he couldn’t. He was in the room that he shared
with his brothers, and, somewhere where he couldn’t see them, in the dark
corners, they were still asleep.
He held his lips shut tight to keep any noises from
escaping. His fear pushed his heart still faster. Summoning his courage, he sat
up on the edge of his bed, and, gripped by an unexplained force, he got down
from his bed and inched his way around the shadows. His brothers breathed
heavily on his right and on his left.
Best not to wake them, Clip, or the whole house will be up
all night trying to fix the problem. He told himself to be quiet as
he carefully placed every footfall, but he ignored the real problem.
If he had been accustomed to faeries and their ways Clip
would have heard his name being spoken on the wind and would have known to try
to go back to sleep immediately without further exposing himself. He was not,
however, at all accustomed to faeries. He only heard the howl of a nearby
breeze. Still, his heart continued to lurch at the words he could not
understand and his mind would not rest.
Opening the door, he quietly slipped out onto the stoop. The
wind immediately grabbed at him, playing through his hair and stroking his
cheeks. He walked towards the well at the other end of the yard. The wind
laughed at him as it stroked its fingers through his hair, pushing him and
pulling him along. Despite its games, he eventually made it to the well in one
piece.
He dropped the bucket down into the water and pulled it back
up again. The water was sweet on his tongue as it slid down his throat.
Eventually the wind slowly became bored with him—such is the
way of some faeries. It died down to a small breeze, off to chase a little bat.
In the wake of the wind’s touch, Clip felt tired again. He
leaned up against the well wall, looking east through half closed eyes. The
sounds of the forest carried to him, sitting there halfway between the house
and the woods. He was not yet ready to go back in.
In all the stories he had heard, the woods were supposed to
have strange magical powers, and were inhabited by creatures that had strange
magical powers. But no one could say with such certainty.
Such is the way of Goldstone wood, so full of mystery that
hardly no one ever tried solving, he thought. His grandmother told him so once.
She said, “Nothing good comes from the Wood.” And everyone knew the fount of
wisdom his grandmother was. That was all he ever knew of the place aside from
the childhood tales he had picked up here and there, spun by a merchants hand,
or snuck behind the back of his mother.
Whether or not he believed the stories he hadn’t decided.
But it would not be because of something his grandmother said. The shadows
passing back and forth beneath the trees were enough to keep him from getting
too curious. Goldstone wood had no paths as far as he could tell, and he wasn’t
going to make any.
Even as he thought this, somewhere deep in the depths of the
ancient trees a wood thrush sang, its song trickling forth like a bubbly
stream. The silvery music floated up to the moon on wispy wings. The sudden
noise made him realize how close to sleep he was and how close to waking up
with dew all over his head in the morning.
He shook himself and stood up straight. The woods may be
mysterious in the day, but they were twice as menacing at night, he was
supposed to be asleep anyway. Turning, he headed back towards the house.
He took two steps before he fell on his face and covered his
head, trying to stop up his ears. The wind roared. The sound pierced the sky
and rattled him to his bones. But the wind wasn’t paying attention to him. A
large, black bird had just flown into the clearing and the wind was fleeing
from before it. The trees all around bent and swayed to the breaking point
under its retreat.
All Clip saw was the bird’s eyes.
Under the tall grass he crouched, trembling, and watched as
the bird landed on the roof of the house. The bird was huge, it stood about a
foot tall on the roof of the house, but, after his initial shock, Clip decided
it couldn’t be dangerous. He berated himself for being so cowardice. The wind
was just acting up and this bird just needed a place to get out of it for a
moment.
And for some reason, a part of him desperately wished he was
right.
When the wind stopped he carefully stood back up and dusted
himself off. The bird looked down on him from its perch on the roof as he
approached the house. He felt its eyes boring into his head. Sitting as it was,
it appeared much larger than Clip had first thought. Its dark feathers seemed
to suck in all of the moonlight around it making it blend into the night as if the
whole black sky was a part of it.
It was a little strange, Clip thought, for the wind to blow
like that. He studied the bird for a moment. He had never seen a bird like that
anywhere before. That was a little strange too, he guessed. He knew enough
about birds, though, to know he didn’t know all the birds in the area. The bird
was obviously nocturnal as far as Clip could tell. It had huge talons, gripping
the thatch roof, probably for snatching unsuspecting morsels to eat.
By all accounts it was a bird of prey, dangerous, but only
for those smaller than it.
Still, Clip tried his best to be unsuspecting as he
approached the house. The bird was not fooled and flew right down beside him.
Clip all but screamed, thinking its talons, smaller than him or not, would make
quick work of his face. But the bird only landed beside him, digging into the
ground instead of his face with its talons.
The eyes of the bird, as bright as fire, as hungry as a
flame, caught his and stared at him. The world around the two seemed to stop in
a second and at the same time spin through all the years, wildly crashing
through the ages in a smear. Clip wanted to look away but he could not, could
not pull his will from that of the bird’s, could not scream his agony, could
not—
“I promise,” he heard himself say, his voice choking as if
on thick poison, any battle of wills forgotten. The bird was gone instantly,
leaving barely a memory, save for a burning pair of eyes. Clip found himself
looking at the empty air. He blinked. The world suddenly seemed darker,
smaller.
A quietness like a hole hung in the Woods as Clip walked
back inside.
CHAPTER II
WHEN CLIP STUMBLED into the kitchen the next morning his
four brothers were already up, gathered around the small table eating eggs, the
poor man’s way to breakfast. Clip stood, as still as a statue, blinking his
eyes against the daylight, before he sat himself. Austeuo grinned at him when
he did sit. “Don’t worry, dad’s already left to hook up the cows.”
Gritting his teeth, Clip scooted his chair up to the table.
He had completely forgotten that they were taking some of the cows to market
today. If Clip could get his hands on Austeuo, his fingers would probably fit
nicely around his neck. But he had to console himself by digging his fork into
the eggs piled on his plate instead.
“You could have gone to help him yourself, no one was
keeping you here," he said through his clenched teeth. It really made no
sense for Austeuo to try to go and help harness the cows; he was too small.
Even for a seven year old he wasn’t very big.
Clip had to try something though.
Austeuo grinned again, only wider. “Oh, but I knew you were
supposed to go. Besides, I didn’t need to go; Mom went with him.” He shrugged
and looked down at his plate.
All of his brothers stopped eating. A solitary fork clanked,
dropped from the hand that held it. “Mom went with him?” Jacib asked.
Clip only stared at Austeuo. They all knew that their mother
worked harder than any of them, especially Austeuo, his pranks and laziness
taking up most of his day. But that Austeuo had the gall, among other things,
to let their mother go out and do the work that should have fallen to him, or
to anyone else but her, really made Clip want to punch him.
“Why did you let her go!” Clip exploded.
Austeuo looked at Clip through wide eyes.
“You could have at least waken me up. Or gotten Jacib,” Clip
said.
“You could have waken yourself up.” Austeuo crossed his tiny
arms and stuck out his chin. Clip hung his head.
But he had an excuse. “I didn’t sleep well last night,” he
said simply. “There was a storm blowing all night. Didn’t you hear it?” He
didn’t mean to ask a question. He was so grouchy that he would have taken
silence for an answer. Anything else would prolong the conversation and he may
have to admit his fault for not waking up early.
On the other side of the table Jacib spoke up. “I didn’t
hear the storm, but I didn’t sleep well. I kept on having bad dreams.”
Grasping onto what Jacib had said, Clip spoke up. If he
could get his brothers to talk about anything else he would be fine. At least
they wouldn’t be talking about him. He could forget about the cows and carry on
with his day.
“Were you being chased by giant snakes?”
Mentioning snakes was one of the best ways Clip knew to get
a response from Jacib.
He took a bite of his breakfast and tried to look coolly at
his brother, waiting for the response.
“No!” Jacib waved his fork in the air. But before he could
defend himself Austeuo jumped in. He started laughing and jeering with his
small hands.
Clip’s two youngest brothers, sitting all the way at the
opposite end of the table, tried joining in on the fun too.
Clip grimaced a little. The plan had worked. All he needed
to do now was finish eating and quietly slip out. But his brothers may have
been taking the teasing too far.
Of all four of his brothers, Jacib was the easiest for Clip
to get along with. To see him in the relentless, merciless grasp of Austeuo
pained him. But no, Jacib would be fine. Everyone knew he was afraid of snakes
and they would get bored soon.
With that thought in mind, Clip piled the rest of his eggs
into his mouth. He had to be out of the room when his brothers finished
arguing.
Grabbing his fork and his plate he stood to leave. He looked
one last time at Jacib and his tormentors, then strode out through the rickety
door into the yard.
With the sun beating down on his back he felt better about
himself. Of course Jacib would be fine, he thought to himself. For one thing,
Jacib knew being afraid of snakes was an illogical fear.
Clip kicked at the grass. He was also going to apologize to
Jacib, later.
Sitting down by the well he picked up the scrubber and began
scouring his plate. He would apologize to Jacib, he told himself again, later.
But later never came.
*****
The dragon flew through the woods, deeper and deeper, past
landmarks only one of his kind could sense. Indeed, he followed the path of his
dark father, one of the many paths woven intricately into the forest. The trees
sank away from him, falling league after league. He smiled, if only to himself.
The Wood feared his kind, the weak thing.
He had to swerve to avoid crashing into a rock that seemed
to appear from nowhere.
Fire rose in his throat as he righted himself. He chuckled
hoarsely under his breath.
But although weak, the Wood is best not to be
underestimated, he reminded himself.
The wood was just as filled with the paths of those unkind
to his kind, like the merry folk of Rudiobus or—and here the dragon shuddered
mid flight—that infuriating hound, as it was with the paths of his father. He
slowed down, reigning in his headlong rush. As he did his senses caught
something, the scent of what he was looking for.
The scent of a small faerie gate.
He halted and found himself before a little pond. A low
wall, covered all over with young growth, surrounded the pond, flowering in a
tiny, solitary shaft of sunlight. He turned the structure over in his
scrutinizing eyes. It was indeed what he was looking for, the gate to the realm
he was to conquer.
Not very impressive, if he were to say so himself. Certainly
nothing like Cozamaloti falls. But he wasn’t going to complain about minor
details involving proving bravery or courage. Why was a dragon to need courage?
He walked up to the wall. It was definitely a faerie gate.
This close he could strongly sense it. He looked down into the waters at the
trees reflected above him; but he was not in the reflection. It could have been
the angle he was at though. There was no arch or entrance in the wall and the
only way in seemed to be taking the plunge.
Something sparkling off to his left caught the dragon’s eye.
He took a second look in the pond and sure enough he saw
what he searched for. His mouth twisted into a pleased grimace. In the
reflection the little rock wall did have an arch. A tiny little thing, it
hardly looked sturdy enough to last the ages. But it fell right across the
middle of the pond. He blinked and it was gone, too late though, he had already
seen it.
He turned into his human form. It was smaller and provided a
better way to access the gate. Apparently he would have to get into the water,
Cozamaloti or not, and, aside from being smaller, the human flesh would bear
the water better than his dragon scales.
He walked up to the edge. The pond rippled as his face, so
close, finally reflected there.
His teeth flashed cruelly under the surface of the water as
he said simply: “I promise”
It was funny, the things that would open a faerie gate. If
the promise of a mortal opened this one though, so be it. The dragon sucked in
his breath, ready for whatever would happen when he passed through into the
realm beyond.
He stepped off into the gate.
CHAPTER III
The sun beat down on the canopy of foliage above Clip’s
head. All of the trees were in full bloom and offered their green clad limbs up
to the sky to shade travelers who happened to be passing by on the road beneath
them, of which there were few. The road cut through the forest as best it
could. Across the old path countless potholes littered the dust.
In the middle of the forest, looking up at the young woods,
Clip rode down the road on the back of the little donkey cart that his dad used
to take any cows that they might want to sell to town. A string of cattle
followed behind him, loosely tied to the side of the wagon, their coats shining
under the mottled sunlight. Jacib sat beside him but every few minutes he was
having to get down onto the dusty path to kick the rim of the rear wheel back
into place.
The forest they were slowly passing by was at the peak of flowering.
A few bees and butterflies flew from flower to flower in the tree tops,
gathering nectar in the heat.
Jacib hopped down, as springy as a lark, and ran around to
the wheel that was beginning to fall off again. As the cart rolled along he
gave the wheel the best kicks he had, his small frame shaking with the effort.
The wheel went precariously back into place and held for a moment.
"We're almost there." Clip dried his shirt sleeve
on his pant leg as he called out to Jacib.
Stopping, Jacib shaded his face and looked down the road. He
grinned. As quick as he could, he jumped back in the wagon. Clip grabbed his
hand and pulled him up. That he could get so excited to sell cows amazed Clip.
The hot, stinky creatures were pungent enough to make Clip wrinkle his nose
even upwind from them on the cart. Maybe a runny nose wasn't so bad after all.
Jacib scooted back and laid in the bed of the cart. Smiling
up at the sun he sucked in a deep breath of air. Clip almost gagged. He thought
he heard his dad chuckle in the seat up front, but he could not tell for sure.
As the wagon rolled along, the trees gave way to thick
patches of grass. Rocks that had ripped through the earth long ages ago rested
by the roadside as the landscape slowly rose up a large hill. Whipping about,
the breath of the ocean caught their faces, salty and clear and bringing with
it all the promises of an infinite horizon. Castle Oriana was right around the
next bend, sitting atop the large hill, overlooking the sea like a stalwart
sentry protecting and delivering those promises.
The telltale signs were obvious even to people who had never
been to the castle. The road became more traveled, boot and wagon tracks packed
down the soft sand into a hard surface, like the rocks that formed the
foundation of the hill itself.
And the noise. The loud vying for attention of the merchants
and shoppers echoing off the crashing waves of the sea port. The village
Sondhold could be heard before it could be seen if someone listened hard
enough.
But being heard couldn't compare with actually seeing it. As
the cart passed under the huge gates to the city Jacib almost squealed.
Spinning around he jumped up, his head twisting, desperate to see all of the
foreign sights that were so new to him. Flags and signs hung everywhere,
dancing in the breeze, hanging from the battlements up on the castle, and
creaking over the doorways and tents and stalls. The flags waved, as if to him!
His head whirled on his shoulders.
Clip shrugged, he had seen all of this before.
The wagon pulled through the streets. People moved out of
the road to make a path for the cart. Their dad guided the cows through the
city, bright vendors and shops passing by slowly with merchants huddled tightly
against the structures to get out of the way of the cows.
But not too close, and they flooded back behind the cart as
if they could push it along faster.
Nearly halfway through the city their father turned on the
bench up front and shouted back at them, “Come take Gray and Gleir.” Clip
barely made out what his dad had said amid the jostling crowd, but he
understood what he was wanting. They were getting to the thick of the market
place by now. The people on the road could no longer move away from the cart because
the streets were so crowded and their dad wanted to go ahead on foot to the
stalls.
Well, if Jacib was so eager to be here, Clip would let him
drive the donkeys through this.
Jacib climbed up to the front of the cart and took the
reins. Their dad stepped down into the street. People flowed past him on the
crowded cobbles, trying to get to the main square.
“Take the cows to the market. Clipseolar knows where to set
them up.” This last part he added looking directly at Clip.
Clip decided he had better be up front to help Jacib find
the way. He averted his eyes from the eyes of his father as he climbed to the
front bench after Jacib.
Their dad looked up at them. "It will take you a while
to get to the stalls. I'm going to go ahead and get the haggling out of the way
with the owner. Maybe I'll see if I can get a buyer too." He patted the
wagon by Jacib's leg.
The patrons to the market rattled about them, and their dad
melted into the mass headed for the square up ahead. Jacib slapped the reins
hard on the donkey’s backsides, following at a much slower pace.
The road twisted before them. Their dad disappeared within a
moment and Clip had to point the way out to Jacib as they passed every turn.
They were coming up to a crossing when a trumpet sounded and made them both
jump. Jacib quickly picked up the reins where he had dropped them.
"Make way for the royal family!" A voice cried
down the street from them.
Jacib grinned and turned to Clip, fully recovered from his
fright. "The royal family!" He cried almost in echo to the man
clearing the street. He stopped the cart short of the road in front of them.
The first of the party trotted in on a huge horse.
"That's the king," Clip told his brother.
"Fidel." Jacib stared wide eyed at the man, at the
royalty. He wore a standard fancy robe of a slightly finer quality than that of
some of the nobles that surrounded him and he rode one of the finest mounts
Jacib had ever seen.
The king waved, being followed by a small, lanky boy,
probably the prince Felix, riding his own horse. The boy looked shockingly
uncomfortable in his gaudy… whatever it was. He kept on pulling at the huge
collar around his neck and making what he probably thought were discrete glares
at any of the shops he passed by that sold clothing wares “in the highest fashion”.
Clip and Jacib both groaned for the poor prince and they secretly hid smirks at
his misfortune.
Last of all princess Una rode by. Clip saw her for a second
then he dropped his eyes, any long suffering of the prince forgotten. She was
beautiful. Her hair was honey colored, unlike his mom or any of his brothers.
It danced about her fair face and fell on her shoulders. And she smiled,
lighting up her expression and revealing white teeth.
Jacib squinted at her. "She looks good, Clip.”
Clip almost blushed. No, not blush, but he did grimace. He
felt his ears tingle and he was certain they must be turning red. He could
hardly believe Jacib would be so brash.
Jacib ignored his brother and looked again at Una. Clip sank
back in his seat as the remaining of the royal party, a few dignitaries and
such, passed by. To the rest of the world he looked as if he was asleep, maybe
a watchful eye would think his ears were a little sunburnt, but no one looked
that closely. When the party was gone around the corner and the street returned
to its regular state Jacib set the cart in motion again.
"She's got to be the best horse rider I've ever seen,
that was a girl, Clip."
Clip startled up and even the most watchful of eyes would
have thought he had just waken from a deep slumber. A good horse rider? A good…
Clip crossed his arms and looked over at his younger brother, turning him over
in his mind’s eye.
Horses.
He shook his head but added to Jacib’s idea, not wanting to
sound like he had any different ideas himself. “She rides it like real
horseman…” no, he thought back, “woman,” he decided eventually.
Jacib bounced and the whole cart trembled, throwing Clip
against the wheel. “Dad says there is no profit in horse farming, but I’m going
to do it one day.” He chewed his lip for a second before continuing. “I’ll have
some cows too, I guess.”
Clip just ignored him as best he could while trying not to
fall into the busy street. He slumped farther down into the seat and closed his
eyes. The sun was getting lower, casting longer and longer shadows over the
narrow streets. The parade had taken more time out of their trip than the day
had left for them. The cart rolled along without picking up any more speed.
“Hey, Clip?” Clip opened an eye to look at Jacib. He was
staring down the road and his forehead bore signs of worry. Clip sat upright
and looked down the road too, but all he saw was more people. Jacib tore his
gaze away from the distance and started looking around at the side streets.
“Have we passed a turn, or are we still in the right place?”
“Oh,” Clip looked back down the street ahead of them. For a
second he didn’t recognize anything. Some of the merchants were beginning to
close shop, and some were just opening up. His eyes were drawn to a sizable
crowd of patrons gathered in front of a familiar looking tavern. The sign above
the door was unreadable at this distance, but he thought he recognized the
shape of it.
“Turn right there,” he pointed to a side road two streets
down from the tavern. Jacib followed the direction. But behind the corner the
street ended. Jacib spun in circles looking around the alley, trying to find a
side street, but there was none. He turned to Clip.
Clip shrugged and thought back over the route they had
taken. Somewhere, they must have made one wrong move. He sighed, whenever it
was, he had probably been too busy to notice, and now he had no idea where they
were.
CHAPTER IV
THE COWS SOLD at a fair price.
The deal was made by the time Clip and Jacib finally got to
the stalls. The buyer complained the whole time during the trade about bad
service. Their father silently took the tongue lashing, bearing in mind that
the gentleman intended to never conduct business with him again.
He kept his silence the whole trip home too. He only spoke
once, as they passed the fence along the road leading to their house and he saw
a portion of it had fallen over. The remaining cows were out of that pasture
for the season, but their dad set them to the task of repairing it before they
were moved in.
The next morning found Clip struggling beneath the three
finely cut small logs that he carried. His feet walked as sure as ever across
the grassy field, catching in tufts of wheat and almost sending him into a fit
of falling. Jacib looked to him, a bundle of rope in his hands, his eyes full
of wonder, as if he could lighten Clip's mood by his own disposition! Clip
almost snorted but caught himself at the last moment.
Jacib turned and didn't seem to notice as he pranced along.
"One of these days I'm going to ride horses as good as princess Una."
He ducked under the fence and dropped the rope he had been carrying on the
other side.
Clip dropped his load of logs. He hated Una. Jacib wouldn't
let the subject drop, bringing it up with any chance he got. He untied the bag
around his waist. Already Una rode horses through his head all day, smiling
with seemingly no provocation.
He tossed down his knife and went to work on the fence. A
section between two posts had fallen, probably during the wind storm a couple
of nights ago. He lifted one of the carefully crafted logs he had brought in
place of the gap in the structure.
"Jacib, tie that one down," he called to his
brother. Without much hesitation Jacib quit talking and scampered over
beginning to tie the log to the post.
Clip stood back. Una dance before his eyes, that stupid
smile playing on her lips. He stopped and picked up a second log, hefting it on
his shoulder. She needed to get out of his head and Jacib needed to stop
bringing her back. He set the next log on the post.
"Jacib, you go ahead back to the house."
Jacib looked at him, open mouthed. "We're not even
close to being done, Clip."
Clip shoved the log in place and turned on his brother.
"I don't need you to help me."
He coughed and played with his hair. He softened his voice
and said: "I can put up this fence. You can go ahead and play."
Jacib backed away. He looked at the broken fence. All of the
tools laid on the ground.
His expression flitted from confusion to Clip's face. Clip
arched his eyebrows and Jacib finally started walking off. He called over his
shoulder, "Call me if you need me. I'm going to go play with
Austeuo."
Clip went back to work. He smelled his own sweat, gathering
beneath his arms and dripping down his shirt. The sun beat mercilessly on his
head. He hefted the last log onto the two posts. It was going to take a while
to tie. Jacib always did the tying and he was much faster at it than Clip.
But tie it he must.
His fingers fumbled with the rope as he tried to bind it
around the post. He licked his lips and yanked the knot he had tied. It gave
way and he fell hard on his back, knocking the wind out of him.
He silently wished his fingers the worst of luck in all of
their future undertakings and got up. He dusted off his pants and glared at the
fence. First princess Una wouldn't leave him alone and now the fence didn't
behave either. Forget that he had never taken the time to learn to tie
properly. Was Una the princess of wood as well as the land? Making fences fall
down if she wanted to cause someone trouble.
He took the knife and cut another, longer piece of rope.
*****
The dragon smiled down on the little realm. He had found it
easy enough to conquer, being inhabited by beings so lost to their surroundings
that they had bent to his will easily. All he had really needed was to get into
the realm, and the boy had given him no problems when it came to that.
The monkey like creatures that lived in the sparse forests
of the realm when he first arrived made for great slaves. The dragon had to but
walk into their demise and they immediately followed his every order. The land,
however, was a feisty beast to tame. He held his grip on it for the moment, but
only loosely. He needed time to let his poison sink in and corrupt the very
foundation of the demise before he could return to the dark father with any
glad tidings.
But he smiled. All he needed was time.
Below him, in the courtyard of his new castle, the little
creatures were already finishing the last touches on the… what was it they were
doing? The dragon leaned over the balcony rail and peered at the strange structure
the sorry little wretches were so intent on fussing over.
It was a solid chunk of…something, he could not tell what.
As he watched them they polished off the crude block with several fine cloths,
sometimes using two of their hands and sometimes using three, balancing
themselves with the other. After a moment he got bored. It mattered little what
it was. They had the walls all finished, and were fine craftsmen if nothing
else. The dragon took to the air and flew across his new demise. It was small,
but everything about it seemed miniature so it all fit together well enough.
And its smallness made it fortifiable.
It also helped that he was big, made that much bigger
compared with tiny things.
He flew higher and higher, reaching the farthest reaches of
the realm before he circled back. He opened his jaws and spit fire. All the
inhabitants trembled when the roar fell like thunder on their ears. The
foundation of the demise shook to the core but it held grimly to itself.
The dragon raced through the low lying clouds. He would rule
the entire realm soon enough. It would be his, earned by the effort he had put
into it, and then no one could take it without first killing him. He’d like to
see them try. He landed on the tallest tower in the whole castle and smiled
down on his little realm again.
All the little monkeys had left the castle to shelter in the
woods at his roar. The entire courtyard was empty and desolate save for
whatever it was the creatures had been working on. The dragon glided down to a
lower perch to have a look at it. He saw no discarded rags so they must have
finished whatever it was and put away their tools before he scared them off. When
he saw what they had made he smiled wickedly. Flames burst forth from his chest
and he leapt back into the air. The inhabitants of the land sunk deeper beneath
the forest canopy and hid there, shaking. The dragon flamed and circled higher
and hotter above them.
And in the courtyard, on a small pedestal, a polished statue
of the dragon watched over it all.
*****
Water splashed off Clip's hands. Cool tricklets rolled off
blades of grass at his feet. However much the water sparked, though, his face
was downturned. Sweat mingled with a amp presence on the brink of his nose,
dropping in drips.
Jacib walked up behind him, coming from the house. So the
time was here, the remaining three of Clip's brothers would come through the
door soon enough. Begrudgingly he sidled over to give Jacib a spot at the well,
which he took.
Stepping back Clip buried his face in his shirt. The cool
moisture absorbed through to his hands. He dried his palms on his sleeves
before looking up at Jacib. Clip opened his mouth but said nothing before he
was unable to speak. With a yodel Austeuo marched into the yard.
Forgetting any notion he was about to say to Jacib, Clip
spun around and faced his brother.
"Dad's home!" Austeuo shouted. Clip froze for a
heartbeat. The wind stirred past his face and weaved through the tops of the
trees. He should ask his dad for help. He should go to him right now and tell
him that it was too dark to finish the fence. But it was good enough to last
the night, he thought, shrugging his shoulders.
The trees waved and swayed to a stop. Austeuo looked
directly at Clip. "And he's mad at you," he snickered.
Clip straightened his shirt and once again opened his mouth
to speak. The words made it to the edge of his tongue before they rolled back
and fell down his throat. Just then his father stepped out of the house. He
wore the second most pained expression Clip ever experienced in his childhood.
He looked around for a moment before settling on Clip and Jacib. Clip's insides
withered and whirled about in his throat. He felt Jacib looking back and forth
between him and his dad, probably wondering why his dad was upset.
Clip's words hung in his throat and he swallowed hard to get
them to go down. He took a step backwards then quickly sprung into action. He
finished drying his hands on his shirt and walked towards the house as if he
was casually going in for supper. He knew one thing. He had done right. The
fence was set up properly, if not finished. He came home when the sun started
to set. And he only did those things because he knew the cows weren't even
going to be in that field for another season.
Clip's dad grabbed his arm at the door, and despite all his
reassurances, Clip almost fell to pieces right then. Wiping his weary face with
his other hand his father said, "Wait for a second while I wash up."
His dad let go and Clip followed him over to the well. Jacib stood beside them
and still looked confused, but he was catching on quickly, going through the
same thoughts Clip had.
Clip stood on his uncomfortable feet wishing Jacib would say
something. His best options were for Jacib to say something first, his dad to
spill the beans, or him to do something stupid, in that order.
No one did anything yet, however. Austeuo ran inside the
little house and peeked through the window at the stiff trio. Jacib rocked
slightly back and forth like he wanted to sit down but didn't. He dared not
sit, he thought. The head of the house just scrubbed his powerful forearms.
Without a word he worked the dirt from a hard day's toil out of his fingers.
Clip stood, curling and uncurling his toes inside his shoes.
He licked his lips. What did his eternally slow father want? He licked his lips
again. The same sun that made the trees green baked any remaining moisture away
from his rapidly drying skin.
Father stood up and spun around to face his two boys, wiping
his hands dry on a small part of his shirt that was still clean. "Out by
the barn," he said, his voice slightly husky and drawing out the middle of
every word "the cattle broke out of their pens. The best I can tell is one
of the cows clean out charged the gate and busted through."
It must have been quite a sight to see happen. For any
number of reasons a cow might get spooked and try to fly the coop. They could
dance and prance in big circles, completely terrified of their own shadow at
that point.
But to actually see a cow, driven mad by some unknown
assailant, bust through the gate was a new level of fear.
The fear struck Clip to the heart. He shuddered all the way
to the ground before he knew why. What could have done that? The giant bird he
had seen a few nights before clawed its way back to the forefront of his mind.
He could picture the bird, yellow eyes gleaming, ripping into the poor cows
locked up in their pen. He tried to push the thought away.
Had he?...
No. The bird, big as it was, was too small to try eating a
whole cow. The bird was a bird, after all! The yellow eyes stared at him from
deep within their soul, two black coals floating in sulphur. They told him
differently. He shook his head, trying to let his golden hair bat away the evil
image.
"Whatever the reason," his father was saying,
"the cows got out into the main pasture."
Jacib gave a small groan. Whether it was because he thought
they would have to round up them cows tomorrow and put them back in their pens
or because he realized the fence must not have been up, Clip could not tell.
The image of the bird wrapped around his head making his thoughts move like mud
climbing up a mountain.
He heard his father getting on to Jacib. He pressed his mind
to think. Jacib didn't do anything wrong. He struggled to remember what had
happened. And then he did.
Una.
Her stupid face. Jacib probably still wouldn't have got the
job done before dark. He was too busy fantasizing about horses and talking his
head off to work. The man of the house turned to him. He focused and felt his
knees go weak and almost give out on him. For a second he wished he was lost in
thought again. He could barely look at his dad, but the moment of truth had
arrived.
"Clipseolar, several of the cows got out by the woods
where you and your brother weren't done repairing the fence. I caught a couple
of them and put them up in the barn for the time being. The rest will have to
be hunted down and caught tomorrow.”
CHAPTER V
Clip stared across the yard at the still woods after his
father and everyone else had gone to bed. Since the night he had seen the black
bird—was it only two nights ago?—the wind had hardly blown at all. The woods
moaned and groaned but not from the wind. Clip could hardly tell of what
though.
Shaking himself he got up and began pacing. That bird must
have been faerie. The thought sprang to his mind before he could stop it, yet
it made sense. What else could make the wind blow like that? Then make it stop
for days? His head throbbed with every step, and the horrible, vicious yellow
eyes clawed at his brain.
He sat back down hard on the stoop. What else? He rubbed his
sore head. There was nothing else. There were no faeries to begin with, he told
himself. They were the tales of merchants who needed something to draw in
customers.
But the eyes burned.
“No!” He beat the thought of the bird back into its place,
deep within the recesses of his mind, never to be disturbed again. He should
not worry about it.
But if it was a faerie, if he had…
No! He would not think of this. He had plenty to worry about
with the cows escaping.
He leaned up against the hard wall of the house and sunk
into himself, all his thoughts chasing each other around in his head. The wall
at his back felt solid. He pressed into it, trying to draw comfort from thin
air.
He sat until he lost track of how long he had been sitting
there. He finally lifted his head.
The moon was low, the trees opposite him still hid it from
the world. Without much of a thought he stood in the lengthening shadows. His
mind was numb from strain. He put his hand out to steady himself on the
doorframe and his arm almost collapsed beneath his weight.
“Dragon’s teeth, Clip,” he barely whispered under his
breath. He steadied himself on his own two feet and added: “Even if it was a
faerie, it will be fine.”
When he opened the door darkness greeted him. His eyes took
a moment to adjust to the interior of the hut. The dim light of the moon cast
his shadow huge and ugly on the back wall as he stepped inside.
Austeuo and Jacib were asleep, side by side, on the cot in
the corner. Clemens sprawled against the wall, as he always slept, his feet on
Aubin’s back. If both of those boys didn’t grow up to have back issues Clip
would be amazed. The door to his parent’s room was closed. Whether they slept
or not he could not tell.
A faint wind crept past Clip, tossing the hair of everyone
in the room and catching the breath as it exited their mouths. He turned. The
shadow on the wall mimicked his every step in its own solitary world as he
moved to the cot beside his brothers.
His head fell to the pillow. The last thought on his
troubled, sleepless mind, the burning yellow eyes of a snake about to eat him.
He is running. The air pumping in and out of his lungs,
burning his throat. The sky is black, the worst kind of black. Not a star or a
moon does anything to light his steps.
A giant creature with a tongue the color of a setting sun
chases him. Though he turns in his flight to peer behind him he cannot see his
pursuer stalking from shadow to shadow. So he focuses his thoughts, his feet,
his breathing all on out running his eminent doom.
He flies over rocks, stumbling and tripping but never
loosing a pace until he comes to a cave mouth. The smell of burning fire pours
over him and floods his senses. For a second he hesitates. The beast draws
nearer behind him and he squeezes his eyes shut before plunging into the
cavern.
The smoke he had smelled when he first came to the cave
mouth overwhelms him. Without knowing why, he knows he cannot turn around and
leave. He spins in the dark but behind him, like everywhere else, is black.
Somehow he senses that the beast is no longer behind him, but beside him. He
tries to move but cannot. His body is completely paralyzed.
The creature laughs in his ear. “This is a surprise, now
isn’t it?” His eyes widen desperately, searching the darkness, but he cannot
find the speaker. Still, his sense tell him that something large is beside him,
a presence darker than the cave itself.
“I send for your realm, and here you are instead.” The voice
echoes and re-echos down the cavern. “Have you come for my kiss?”
He does not answer. Before he can something tugs at him,
brutally pulling him off his feet, sending him flying through the air. Whatever
the creature is, it shrieks. Claws extend from the darkness trying to grab for
him. He opens his mouth in a scream before everything rushes past him and he
loses his voice.
*****
Clip cracked open his eyes. His breath rasped down his
throat, pulling like a thorn bush into his lungs. The light of the early
morning stabbed between his mind and eyes.
What?…
What had he just been thinking? He groaned but no clear
thoughts came to him. Fire and smoke. Claws reaching out to grab him. He
doubled over and retched, but nothing came out of his lips.
He pressed his hands to his head. What a cruel, cruel world.
The wind stirred outside and the sun peeked between the trees, falling on him,
and burning his eyes. He groaned again and licked his lips. They were cold and
dead feeling.
He was sitting like that when someone screamed. A moment
later, just on the edge of his conscience, someone picked him up. He was fussed
over and placed gently in his bed.
His mom looked down on him and she was so terrified that
Clip wanted to get up and run away from the terror that must surely be in the
room. He strained but he couldn’t move his hands that had become so cold.
Another moment later—or maybe it was a century and a half,
his agony burned so—the fussing went silent. He barely turned his head and saw
his mother talking to Clemens. In his fading vision he saw her mouth move but
couldn’t hear anything she must have been saying.
Then his vision faded completely.
The next time he woke it must have been hours later. Someone
said something about dragons. He struggled to sit up. Pain shot like a thorn
through his entire body. Outside of his window his dad was using foul language
to describe something. Clip painfully leaned closer. His vision almost
disappeared and he feared he might pass out again. However, he barely didn’t.
“Jacib went around the back,” his voice was hoarse, as it might
be from the strain of yelling too much, “into Goldstone Wood.” The words rang
in his head and rattled him to his bones.
Silence followed, but not the silence of delirium. Clip
could feel his dad’s head fall. In the silence the sound without a sound shook
Clip to pieces, carrying the pieces broken and torn, away with it. Not
Goldstone Wood. He cried and his tears fell away too, leaving nothing but sleep.
Sleep for a moment.
Sleep for a day.
All was quiet. All was dark. The candle by the door once
again was not burning. Clip probed his memory. Fog, as thick as cobwebs,
partially lifted from his mind and for a second he remembered.
He remembered the bird. He remembered the dragon.
“What are you thinking, Clip?” He was surprised at his now
outburst of apparent fever induced delirium. Dragons were a myth. But even as
he doubted he could not shake the yellow eyes that burned in the back of his
head, dropping the fog, as thick as ever, as dark as the shadows, as still as
the air, back over his senses.
Well then, what had happened? He would not be beat out
easily. He pressed through the fog to a place where his father sat outside his
window. His mother wept, her hands on her face, in the illusion. And Clip
remembered Jacib was gone. He was gone into Goldstone Wood, a place of myths
itself.
“No, Clip,” he told himself, “you’re delusional from fever.
Father was talking about something else and you got confused.” Barely hoping
for what he would see, he looked over to the cot where Jacib would be asleep if
he was still there.
The cot was empty.
His breathing came in gasps and the room swam and swirled
before him. He gathered himself in his arms and blinked away the tears that
sprang involuntarily to his eyes. “But Austeuo,” he tried telling himself, “was
gone too.” He looked back at the bed, dropping tears on his knees and on his
bed. Neither Austeuo or Jacib were on the other cots. And Austeuo certainly
wouldn’t go into Goldstone Wood.
Clip started rocking himself to sleep and almost didn’t hear
it when the cow began screaming. The agonizing, baleful noise tore through the
night sky, killing any thought of security, and ripped out and tore to shreds
his heart. But it couldn’t out run the evil snarls that chased it.
Clip thought he knew what made it. He tried his hardest to
put sleep, or delirium, between the horrible cries and himself. But he could
not. Finally the screams stopped. Even the echoes died away. He raised his
head; the battle was over. Resigned to his fate he got to his feet. No one else
was about, straining his ears he could not hear anyone running to see what the
matter was. Expecting to see another human soul in this horrible nightmare was omething
he had given up on.
He walked over to his window, his feet like mud, his legs
like water.
And he looked out.
The cow was dead, mauled beyond recognition. Above it stood
the dragon. Its fangs dripped, gleaming back the fire in its eyes while its
throat swallowed the moonlight, pouring out foul poison. Clip’s own throat
constricted, only taking air in sharp inhales. The dragon looked at him with
the yellow eyes of the bird. The yellow eyes of the creature that preferred the
night, the one who was a bird of prey.
Clip struggled for air, gasping it in at too slow a rate.
But his vision stayed with him. The dragon smiled. If an expression of joy
could ever be found on a dragon’s lips this was it. Its gruesome teeth spread
out to cover more and more of its face in a hideous display of unsatisfiable
hunger.
Clip almost fell down, probably never to rise again. It was
a dragon. He knew, he probably always knew, it was a dragon. He drew himself to
the fullest height his little frame possessed. The enemy of all the worlds—if
dragons were real, faeries and their demises must be too—was out his window,
preying on his father’s animals.
He gritted his own teeth, in a much less powerful way, and
clenched the window seal.
Fear flooded his mind for a second, a brief moment when the
Clip of five minutes ago would have cowered away, before survival instinct
kicked in and he yelled.
His voice left his mouth quicker than he would have
expected…if he had the chance to expect anything at all. His mind was working
very slowly, responding half-heartedly to stimulus of the outside world because
of the dragon poison. But his little cry, his accusation of such a great evil,
shot through the dark and left him with more inside than he first felt.
The dragon staggered back, spewing more fumes high above his
head, its claws tearing away at the soft earth beneath its feet. Thick air
descended from its mouth, pooling in the yard, before it beat its wings and
leapt to the trees on the edge of the clearing, leaving the cow. It crashed and
plowed through the forest, cracking whole trees in two, then it disappeared out
of sight.
Clip sunk to his knees. How could a dragon be here? Dragons
were mythical beasts only remembered because of the tales of grandmothers. And
they could never show up without the world knowing. He heard a flutter of wings
and for a second thought the dragon was come back. He choked and turned his
head to the window.
A little wood thrush had just landed on the frame. It looked
at him from behind the shadows, but otherwise ignored him as it threw up its
voice to the freshly stilled air.
Clip took his legs up in his arms. He suddenly knew what had
happened, despite the dragon poison coursing in his head. The dragon had
disguised itself as a bird, a big black bird, all those nights ago, and for
some reason was stealing their cows, probably to eat.
And now it was in Goldstone Wood.
Along with Jacib.
Clip rocked back and forth and absent-mindedly studied the
little wood thrush. His encounter with the dragon was slowly leaving his mind,
fading into the obscurity of delusional fever. But he did remember that his
brother was gone, probably captured by the dragon. And he remembered the other
bird, the one with the eyes as bright as fire, as hungry as a flame, who was
the dragon. Strangely though, he was not afraid of the bird in front of him,
though he might should have been.
Its talons were for gripping branches, small and elegant so
it could trickle forth from its speckled belly music in the treetops. He could
not see the bird’s eyes, though he imagined them to be full; full of happiness,
full of joy, full of everything his brother took into Goldstone Wood.
Clip walked over to his bed, tripping and falling over
himself. He laid down and cried; cried himself to sleep to get away from
himself if possible. And he did sleep. After a while the wood thrush stopped
singing and flew over to the little boy in his bed.
Landing on his head, the little bird guarded his dreams for
the rest of the night.
CHAPTER VI
MORNING CAME too soon. Everyone else was still asleep.
Austeuo was back in his cot, presumably he had returned some time during the
night. Jacib was still gone.
Clip tested himself by sitting up. After he found he could
use his body he stood all the way. Some of the dragon poison still lingered in
his body and he felt weak. His limbs were exhausted and felt like they were
burning from the inside out. The room faded in and out of focus, but he forced
his eyes to hold it before him, the bed where Clemens and Austeuo were flopped,
the covers Austeuo laid on top of, and the doorway leading outside.
He heard a flutter of wings and spun around to face the small
wood thrush sitting on his pillow, still in the room from the night before. The
wood thrush flapped its wings and flew to the window, bouncing back and forth
there as if it wanted something from Clip. Clip hardly noticed though as his
eyes were drawn past the little bird to the yard outside and all the broken
trees therein.
He prepared himself quickly, slipping into his shoes, out
the door, and across the clearing. The sun was hardly up, probably about an
hour away. The clearing was made nearly double in its size by the ugly scar the
dragon had left the night before. A thick cloud hung over the whole area. If it
had been high in the sky, the sun still would have been missed.
The field was desolate of life except for the boy and the
little bird, who followed behind him. The cow was still strewn out on the lawn
as it had been left. No one must have returned for it. If the sun did not come
out it wouldn’t have been missed by many, so vacant of life was the clearing.
Clip choked amidst the dark fumes and lost his footing in
the thick morning mist. He fell to the ground. He didn’t even know what he was
doing out headed for the Wood. Did he plan on killing the dragon? His mind swam
inside his head once again unable to form coherent thoughts.
Suddenly the world darkened. It may have been just him, but
Clip missed the sun desperately. He thought he spun in the darkness, trying to
get a better look at his surroundings, but it may have been his mind reeling.
Colors flashed before his eyes. Brilliant streaks of red, yellow, green, and
white twirled around him.
He saw images in the air. A horde of tiny dragons flew about
him, circling as buzzards would circle a dead carcass. He scrambled about on
his weak limbs, growing weaker by the heavy, jarring placements of his hands
and knees. Desperately looking around he saw a limb, broken by the large
dragon’s hasty flight the night before, with sharp splinters on one end. He pressed
his way towards the stick hoping to fend off his assailants if he could.
But he could not.
His legs gave out. His arms fell beneath his face. The
putrid air flooded into his lungs and suffocated him to the point of
extinction. But the world still spun about him, picking up pace, flinging evil
images, depictions of nameless horrors, about him and he found no such relief.
The wood thrush landed mere inches away from his face. As he
tried to shoo it away Clip’s hand landed in a deep pool of the dead cow’s
blood. Thick black goo ran down his wrist and stained the sleeve of his only
shirt. He wiped off as much of the blood as he could into the dirt, but it
stayed.
He once more pulled his limbs under himself and got to his
knees. His vision blurred without any help from delirium as his gaze settled on
the pool of blood in front of where he knelt.
A ghostly pair of empty irises stared back at him from the
reflection. The mouth below the depressed eyes twisted, frozen in a horrid
sepulcher for the tongue. Clip startled back and hid his face from himself,
tears falling down his arm.
His father flashed through his head, wearing the expression
he had worn when he first came into the yard to tell his two sons that they had
let all the cows escape. Clip saw his own face there, dark as blood, but it was
more pained than his father’s ever was. And it showed something ugly, something
it could not hide.
It was deceived. Deceived by the lies it told to itself.
Lies of innocence and of pride.
It was broken. Broken by its own hands.
The dragons whirled faster about in their deadly dance. Clip
saw countless images flash in their midst, going by quickly so that he could
not retain anything he had seen once it disappeared. The little wood thrush
came back up to him again and hopped in the line of his vision.
“You did this,” it spoke the accusing phrase, but it almost
sounded like a plea. Clip curled up in a tight ball at the bird’s feet. Did it
have to be true? He spoke to the dragon those many nights ago when it was
disguised as the black bird. But what did that matter? Dragons would hunt
anywhere they wanted to. Who was he to stop them?
“You did this.”
An illusion flew in front of his face. It was clearer than
any of the other ones before it, a scene full of ruined ashes. A great dragon
stood in front of a charred gate, and in front of him stood a girl. He was
talking to the girl as if she were his own, but the girl faded into nothing and
Clip saw the yet unfulfilled desire deep in the great dragon’s
soul before the entire image faded away.
Clip thought he recognized the girl, though he knew he had
never seen her like that. He dug for the answer and found it: the girl talking
to the dragon was princess Una.
She was a friend of dragons!
“You did this,” the wood thrush sang again, gently.
She had sent the dragon to him in the first place! She did
this!
“You did this.”
He didn’t! Clip doubled over and cried, holding his sides
with dirty hands. “Then no one did this.” But no, he could not believe that.
Dragons were evil, but he had let this happen. For the first time since he had
spoken it, he remembered his promise to the black bird. The promise he had made
on the first night he saw the black bird: “I promise protection.”
Protection, cooperation, shelter.
To take the creature in as his own.
It was his fear that had led Clip to make such a promise,
his own need and desire. And it was wrong.
“You did this.”
Clip tried to keep tears from falling all over himself but
they came anyway. He wiped his face with his hand and looked at the thrush.
“Yes.”
He fell over and lost himself to crying. Hot tears burned on
his face even more dreadfully than the dragon poison had burned. He coughed and
choked as putrid smoke poured out from deep within his chest. Time seemed to
stop for him while the rest of the world spun on forever and ever, leaving him
behind to die.
But he felt strong arms come around him. He looked up and
saw a prince holding him; he could be no other than the most royal of royalty.
The wood thrush was in His eyes, singing a beautiful song. Clip heard the song
and his heart rose at the sound. The prince lifted him and Clip let Him. He sat
upright in the morning air. All the smoke was gone, as well as the images of
the dragons.
“Yes, you brought this dragon here, but do you know what you
have done against me?”
The Prince spoke. Clip looked into His eyes and he did know.
He knew everything. He saw a young boy hidden in those eyes and he saw a man
older than the generations of the stars themselves, both ready to forgive a
great evil.
“Yes,” his lips trembled but he forced the words out.
“And will you follow me?”
“Yes,” he did not need to force the words out this time.
They spilled off of his tongue in a torrent. “Beyond my days, my master.”
So it was that Clipseolar, a mortal, was knighted as a
knight of the Farthest Shore by the Lumil Eliasul.
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8 comments:
Oh, my! What an epic and enthralling story! I enjoyed the vivid imagery and the theme of admitting our wrongdoing. I also liked your names. Terrific work.
Jacib is my favorite character. I love the scene of him with the cart wheels. Although your ending left me hanging as to his situation, I thought it was a good one for a short story. Good short stories, many times, do leave you hanging, wishing for more. That is what keeps us coming back to Mrs. Stengl's books...that need for more Goldstone Wood tales! So many times she leaves a minor character "unfinished" in one book only to be finished later down the road. Although the more she writes, the more I realize that one of her characters is never completely finished!!
Jonathan:
Wait...where's the rest? What happened to Jacib? And who was the dragon in the beginning that wished to "defy" his father? Wahhhh I wanna know!! :)
Seriously, though, your imagery is so vivid that experiencing the story as if you're a part of it yourself just happens....completely naturally.
I will say though....every scene that featured the Dragon....ABSOLUTELY TERRIFYING. And I'm pretty sure it's not just me reading it alone in my room at 2 AM...the downright terrifying essence you captured with little to no dialogue for him was just genius.
Gotta say though, one of my favorite lines is: Thick black goo ran down his wrist and stained the sleeve of his only shirt.
Just that one line...it says so much...
Fantastic job! I want more! :D
-Melanie
Wow, so intense! Great job, Johnathan! Hope to see more work from you in the future! :D
My goodness. This is amazing. But the ending- what happens to Jacib? Does Clip ever find him? Please tell me you're going to write a sequel!
I...I don't know what to say. I don't think I have anything to say. That was, powerful. The writing was great, the descriptions beautiful... I don't know what else to say. It was powerful. But I said that already.
-Rebekah Lawrence
Wonderful writing and such a powerful story!
Thank you everyone for all the nice comments. They mean so much to me.
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