When Una Came of
Age
By: Molly
When
Una came of age,
Suitors
came on her life’s stage,
Among
them a dreaded prince.
That
dreaded prince
(Whom
Felix fenced)
Was
the Prince Aethelbald.
That
lovelorn prince
She
had hated since
The
day that she had met him.
Princess
Una said
“I
refuse to wed
That
odd Prince Aethelbald.”
Her
loathing grew
After
quite a few
Restless,
hot nights.
During
those nights,
Una’s
ring became tight
And
singed her finger.
Prince
Aethelbald tried
To
help her fried
And
aching dainty hands.
But
Una did not relent
To
this poor kind gent
And
instead walked away.
She
soon fell in a trance
Of
sighing romance
Swooning
for the king’s jester.
The
jester, she found out
Though
people thought him a lout
Was
Prince Lionheart in disguise.
She
gave him her ring
(And
inside, it made him sing!)
And
joyfully, he departed.
But
he soon betrayed
Una,
that fair maid
And
gave her ring away.
Una
finally became
No
longer quite so tame
When
she became a dragon.
But
lo and behold,
That
prince so bold
Rescued
Princess Una.
By
the prince’s arts,
He
changed her heart
Formed
it like his own.
Una
relented,
Formally
repented
And
gave up her hardness of heart.
So
Una finally married
And
then she got carried
To
Aethelbald’s kingdom.
And
so it ends
All
become friends
And
live Happily Ever After.
_________
13 comments:
Wonderful, Molly! I've been waiting for this one:) you did such a good job telling the story in your own clever way!
Oh this great! I just love the poetic translation of the story. This is really good, Molly.
And such a perfect way to end the wonderful contest...
...Happily Ever After
Beautiful. The ryhmes, making the Heartless plot a ryhme was amazing.
It's kinda sad the fanfic contest is done.
I LOVED all of them.
Great! I love the lines, "He changed her heart/Formed it like his own." And what could be better than ending "Happily Ever After?" Are you planning to host another big contest next year, Anne Elizabeth?
I sure am! Beginning to make plans for either an art or fiction contest coming up in January . . . So keep watching for it! :)
What an excellent way to retell Heartless! Couldn't help but think of the Chorus Prologue from Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet. I cannot write good rhymes to save my life, so that was really clever. Just think if Heartless were to become a musical, your poem could be the focal point, the main song that holds it all together. As a musical fan, (more like an obsessive musical lover), I'd definitely go watch it! Keep up the excellent work.
All the stories and poems were amazing. Thanks for posting them. I don't know how the judges made decisions between them. God bless.
Nice, poetic synopsis of Heartless! I agree with the judges about the clever rhymes - the wording is fun. :)
Thank you, Anne, for hosting this contest!! This was wonderful to be a part of - and it was wonderful to read all of the beautiful, unique, creative submissions. :)
~Amber
Thanks, all, for such kind comments!
~Meredith~ Aw, that's so sweet about the play! Haven't read Romeo and Juliet yet (though I have read quite an amount of Shakespeare). I will have to look up the scene of which you speak!
~Anne~ If you do a fan art contest, am I allowed to take pictures, or do I have to draw it (which I don't mind at all)?
I REALLY hope you do Veiled Rose! :)
That is a really good poem :) hope you keep it up. It's so sad the contest is over hopefully there will be many more.
This had to take a lot of thought. You did a very good job, Molly!
Anne, I've thoroughly enjoyed all the fan fiction entries. You have some very talented fans! Thank you for being such an encourager to other writers (and artists), and providing them a place on your blog.
To Ms. Molly:
Romeo and Juliet is a great example of Shakespeare's tragedies. Othello is my favorite of his tragic plays, but R and J is a good one, too, especially to see in a theater performance. The scene I mentioned is right at the very beginning of the play. The Chorus basically tells the whole story in a nutshell, kind of like a movie trailor. Do you write lots of poetry? Hope that you had a wonderful Thanksgiving.
Meredith:
Actually, no, I don't write a lot of poetry. I might if it happens to come to mind, and it's usually the only thing I find I can do for fanfiction things. Short stories for Fan fiction just don't work for me, unless I can REALLY get a good idea.
I mostly write short stories and unfinished novels (which actually I'm working on my going-to-be-first-ever finished novel).
Have you ever seen a performance of any Shakespeare?
I haven't, but I hope I will sometime! =)
I had a great Thanksgiving, and I hope you did too!
Hi, Molly. Yes, my Thanksgiving was wonderful! I ate too much, but I rationalize it by reasonig that it's a good time of year to do so. Totally worth it, of course!
I've always had trouble writing poetry simply because I feel that mine never comes out the way I hope. It's so much fun to read poetry, though. Just to be able to arrange thoughts in such beautiful ways really is a God-given gift. I'm a very wordy writer and so short story contests really help me to try and work on honeing my style. Usually, I have trouble coming up with concise ideas, but Heartless was such a beautiful book I couldn't get it out of my head. God is truly using Ms. Stengl's work, and I was so touched by her inclusion of Monster/Eanrin, a blind protagonist. She really got my mind into hyper drive, so I was able to come up with an idea fairly quickly. Very unusual.
I have seen two Shakespeare plays. One was Romeo and Juliet, which was performed by a British group of actors. Five actors performed multiple roles, and there were very few props. It was amazing. I also saw an outdoor production of one of his comedies, All's Well that Ends Well.
I hope that you keep writing. Best wishes regarding your novel. What is it about? I'll be praying for you. Hope that you have a wonderful day.
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